I've been working on this comedy piece and using mostly VSL (pro edition Orch cube) I am trying to make it more colorful (orchestrally) while limiting it to strings and percussion. I think this is a matter of discovering all of the available articulations in VSL. (I've had VSL for a few months now.)
It's supposed to be a light comedy piece, but it strikes me as a bit dreary and colorless. Perhaps it's a matter of dynamics.
The question is what kind of comedy you set out to achieve. I think the style you have written would work very well for light, romantic comedy where there is an element of control and politeness, but if you were aiming at more of a rambunctious, fallabout cartoony comedy, I would suggest a faster tempo which would make the fast strings more fleeting and lighter of touch. Also extremes of range by focusing on upper strings one moment and then handing over to lower would make the piece less careful and balanced. Flurries and anything unexpected also helps. More rhythmic percussion could add more drive.
A classic (and often imitated) comedy style was created by Carl Stalling for the Warner Bros cartoons and CD compilations of some of these cues are available. With their hairpin changes of tempo and style, they are breathtaking and inspirational.