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Topic: Cane Creek

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    Senior Member squoze's Avatar
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    Cane Creek

    Well, it's a big, muddy creek, OK?
    canecreek.mp3 1.7 MB 1:48
    This is the first song I've ever written, but GPO practically writes itself.
    Please listen and help me learn from your comments, if you have the time.
    At this stage, don't hold back with any opinions.
    I've tried to learn a little about music while I was writing this so I think:
    It has an opening, that introduces the theme; a middle that elaborates on the theme, and an ending that has a climax and a cigarette after that.
    Each section kinda has some suspense building to a small climax.
    And I tried to put together the harmonies with what little I've learned so far.

    That's the good, and I think I know a lot of the bad in the song:
    It's in C. I know, I know.
    It begins in Am and ends in G. Hmm, how did that happen? I don't know.
    The english horn is playing too high in its register, as are probably some others.
    I didn't find a good voice for the 2nd part melody, so I used the horn again.
    The melody gets lost in several parts of the song.
    I am percussion-illiterate.
    I started with a faster tempo, but kept slowing it down. I think it could be even slower, but I don't know.
    I would appreciate any comments. Thanks!


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    Re: Cane Creek

    Very nice, for a first song. The melody is well written and has a way of lingering in the memory.

    I would work on two things. First, most of your melodic lines in the winds would benefit from making more of a smooth legato. Also, I would revisit some of your harmonies; I get the impression at some points that some instruments move to a new chord, but some others hold the previous chord (it's hard to tell without seeing the score).

    The English horn is fine in its high register. Don't worry about that.

    A very good start. Looking forward to your next.
    Dan Powers

    "It's easier to be a composer than it is to compose."
    --Ray Luke (1928-2010)

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