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    New piece--seeking criticism before I continue

    Hey everyone.
    Just a quick post before I leave for rehersal.
    This is a work in progress that's kinda Spanish-sounding, no name yet. I'd like some critisism, comments, suggestions, all of the sorts as I'm still learning about this stuff.

    Thanks,
    -Tex

    EDIT:
    I forgot the link
    http://cptexas0.tripod.com/home/id13.html

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    Re: New piece--seeking criticism before I continue

    Hi CP!
    I think that the piece is great. I don't really know what I could critique on it, except that there's a part in the middle where the strings seem to have too-long of a tail on them so to me they sound smudgy. If that's how they're supposed to be, then never mind my comment. Other than that, it's great! Please continue with it and share when you're done!!
    Steph

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    I think you're off to a terrific start with this!

    Allot of wonderful tonal transitions.


    My only minor critique would be the volume level towards the end.... perhaps a touch high.

    Sounds Great!... can't wait to hear the final work!

    ~jeff

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    Nice job on this, Tex. Some very strong melodic work!

    Tex, I know this is a draft that you'll be working
    over -- yes! continue! -- and I have rather a policy of keeping
    my thumbs the heck out of other people's writing.

    I will comment that the writing gets much stronger as you move
    along -- quite good! There are some real shining moments once
    you get rolling, no kidding... first-rate.

    You've got plenty of good material cooking in this to make a really
    dynamite piece, so go to it, my friend.

    Get in there and work up a sweat like the rest of us do... lol!

    Looking forward to hearing this completed...

    All my best,

    David
    www.DavidSosnowski.com
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    Re: New piece--seeking criticism before I continue

    cptexas,

    It's beautiful! I thought it sounded more Italian than Spanish particularly the part that begins at 3:29 (which is fantastic), but either way it is great.


    Rehersing what? Do you play in an orchestra?


    Regards,
    David

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    Hey, good job. Enjoyed the whole spectrum of emotions in this piece. Starts with a slow slumbering intro into a melancholy melody with the winds... finally blasting off into a more cheerful and playful rhythmical melodies with good quality counterpoint. Sounds very classical and cinematic at times. Please continue...

    Michael
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    Well, even disregarding your age (not quite 16?) this is a fine piece of music. I am quite impressed. Plenty of good material here, waiting for further development. It promises to be quite a beautiful piece of music!

    The only problem that attacks me is that the first 40 or so seconds seem a bit static, need some slight tension, perhaps in dynamics. Perhaps the upper and lower parts could overlap, make it a little less choppy? But after that, it is all whoopee good stuff right to the end.

    Richard

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    Re: New piece--seeking criticism before I continue

    Thanks for all the commentary!

    Steph, which part in the middle where the strings seem to have too long of a tail? I kinda lost you there.

    David, that was actually a rehersal for they play Gypsy, in case you were wondering. I used to play cello in the local youth orchestra, but I'm focusing most of my energy into keyboards now.

    Richard, This is one section I was looking for help on in particular. It seems kind of rigid, like it needs to relax and loosen up. I'm thinking more dynamic variation would do the trick? You mention adding tension. Maybe through use of dynamics I can loosen up the beginning and add tension as I approach the cadance, where the tension peaks then melts down while another character (the violins and woodwinds) takes over. What do y'all think?

    Thanks for all of your encouragement and kind words.

    -Chris

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    Chris,

    Very nice...full and appealling, delicate but not thin. Keep them coming.

    Gary

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    Re: New piece--seeking criticism before I continue

    Hi Chris,
    Sorry, didn't mean to lose you there! Actually, I think that the problem was from the speakers that I was using at the time...I listened again (this time in my studio with the monitors... ) and it was just fine. Sorry about that!! Never mind! Really, the piece is great and I can't wait to hear it when you're finished.
    Steph

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