It sounds to me like you have a chorus which says you made money and you are cruising around like James Dean, ect but I think one needs a little more information about what went on before this scene which could be explained in some verses. Then hopefully you'll have a complete mini story for the listener.
The verses should be structurally different from the chorus and the first line of the chorus should be the hook and probably also the title of the the song. Try and come up with a catchier phrase, something unique, take chances because this can either make or break the song despite all the instrumental work you put into it.
oldbob - the drums are JABB and a few trumpets layered with real recordings. haha yes the first 20 seconds is just a bit of mucking around, actually the other guys wern't even in the room when we did this, it was just two of us making it sound like more people haha.