An update of my 3rd entry last summer.
Modifications hopefully pull themes together better.
My question is; are themes developed enough; are some developments too short; is the work cohesive thru-out?
Gary, there's good material in this, and the cohesion
is serviceable -- it holds together well. I think perhaps
I would look for more contrast in the development;
there is a sense of sameness -- dynamically, rhythmically,
harmonically -- that tends, to my ear, to keep the
material more static than its potential merits.