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    Alice

    This is a piano demo of a song that I might orchestrate but I think it could use some lyrics.

    Alice is my mother's middle name and her birth mother's first name. I've been spending a lot of time with her recently because she is now suddenly 24/7 and we are working out the details for professional assisted care for her as we take turns spelling my special daughter.

    She is also, basically, a self taught pianist, organist and a classically trained singer who, as a young girl, sang in a trio on gospel radio in seattle and accompanied her father, who sang on a gospel radio station which was at the top of the smith tower in seattle. His father was a promising opera singer from germany who had sung in the berlin opera. Voice straining problems brought him to america for a possible cure.



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    Re: Alice

    What a wonderful melody! Very nice!

    Out of my head I can hear a big orchestra playing this song very fine... .

    Best,

    Gunther
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    Very lovely piano, Fastlane. I can also hear it with orchestration, but it stands well on it's own as a piano piece, it's beautiful. I'll pray for Alice and for everyone.

    David

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    Hi, Phil

    I surely enjoy your song, this tribute to your mother.

    I definitely agree with you that lyrics would wed well with it. It has a melody line and phrasing which are completely vocal sounding. I say go for that idea, and then do a simple, small orchestra arrangement of it.

    A beautiful song. Thanks, Phil.

    Randy B.
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    Re: Alice

    Danke shon Gunther.

    I can hear something larger also.

    Phil


    Hello David(Leaf).

    That's kind of why I posted it. I hoped it would stand on it's own without orchestration.

    I'm glad you liked the piano.

    Thanks for the prayers.


    Randy(rbowser),

    I'm happy you enjoyed it. I did a lot of beatin' with that hammer on this one.

    We'll, the problem is that I don't try writing lyrics anymore because I'm not a very good lyricist.

    I'm still looking for a person(s) with that talent. I imagine they are much fewer in number than composers. I posted some other songs on a songwriter's site and got a real positive response on the music but no lyrics that I felt were right for them. The songwriter support sites seem to be pretty much C&W now because of the current state of pop music.

    I'll probably fill it out a little and hope for someone to add a good hook and lyrics someday.

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    Quite a fine songwriting job on this, Phil... well put
    together -- reminds me a lot of Queen in some ways
    (a high compliment).

    This would be interesting to orchestrate -- plenty to
    work with; but I also thing it stands very strongly as
    a straightforward piano piece, too.

    My best,



    David
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    I agree with those that say it easily stands alone. Orchestrated or not it is a very enjoyable piece. If you do decide to Orchestrate, as Randy said, it would be best keeping it simple and small. Great work

    Ron

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    Re: Alice

    Quote Originally Posted by etLux
    Quite a fine songwriting job on this, Phil... well put
    together -- reminds me a lot of Queen in some ways
    (a high compliment).

    This would be interesting to orchestrate -- plenty to
    work with; but I also thing is stands very strongly as
    a straightforward piano piece, too.

    My best,



    David
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    Thanks again David. Your kind comments are always appreciated.

    Queen? Possibly, but I think the verse was sort of an off shoot of a Harry Nielson song. You know, the one where he goes crazy about not being able to live anymore without someone. I just wanted a lot of meandering notes to off set the stair climbing chorus.

    I started this as just an instrumental and then it started maybe sounding like a singable tune so I reworked the chorus because the melody was over two octaves.

    I think it could be fully orchestrated and work as an instrumental.


    Phil

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    Re: Alice

    Quote Originally Posted by rolifer
    I agree with those that say it easily stands alone. Orchestrated or not it is a very enjoyable piece. If you do decide to Orchestrate, as Randy said, it would be best keeping it simple and small. Great work

    Ron
    Thank You Ron. It's nice that you enjoyed it.

    Yes, not too much frosting on the cake.


    Phil

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    Re: Alice

    Hi Phil. Lovely piece. I too sometimes love the simplicity of just using the piano. I'm sure it would sound great with more added but I can hear it sounding fantastic with just piano and a vocal on top.
    Hope someone comes in with some decent lyrics for you.

    Kev
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