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    Cool Hirakiri Jack

    A new adaptation of the classic story, "LORD OF THE FLIES" - by Fred


    1. Piggy's Death, chasing Ralph.

    2. THE RESCUE OF RALPH

    3. HIRAKIRI JACK

    I have altered the story by changing the end:

    Jack and the hunters get punished by a group of Swiss school teachers who by pure coincidence happen to fish shark nearby. Unaware of the savage drama their attention is captured by smoke coming from a little island. They decide to take a closer look.

    After having saved Ralph they decide in true good old Swiss fashion to punish the "Hunters" with a thick Bamboo stick.
    Before Jack gets his share, he manages to escape by running as fast as he can towards the cave of the beast. He there performs a Hirakiri with the knife he earlier had stolen.

    I have altered this drama not only with a different ending but also the title. HIRAKIRI refers to "HIERARCHICAL" -- leaving out the "e-", and taking out the first part of the word, hence "HIRA".

    Jack is the symbol of an evil hirarchical group in society.

    In the end I combined HIRA and KIRI = HIRAKIRI

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    Re: Hirakiri Jack

    just so you know, a quick typo to correct - it's "harakiri".

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    3. HIRAKIRI JACK:

    Hi Fredrik,

    Once again you astound!
    A wonderfully dark introduction that eventually sets sail on a sea of lush strings and winds. It is amazing, truly amazing, how you are able to bring to the surface a clear and definable personality. Effortlessly and ambiguously unmask the facade.

    Michael
    "...Wiktor's a Jekyll-Hyde personality..." - Lycos Music
    http://www.miserymadebeautiful.com

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    Quote Originally Posted by qccowboy View Post
    just so you know, a quick typo to correct - it's "harakiri".
    Hi there, Michel!

    I have altered this drama not only with a different ending but also the title. HIRAKIRI refers to "HIERARCHICAL" -- leaving out the e-, and taking out the first part of the word, hence "HIRA".

    Jack is the symbol of an evil hirearchical group in society.

    In the end I combined HIRA and KIRI = HIRAKIRI



    Fred

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    Quote Originally Posted by Michael A. Wiktor View Post
    3. HIRAKIRI JACK:

    Hi Fredrik,

    Once again you astound!
    A wonderfully dark introduction that eventually sets sail on a sea of lush strings and winds. It is amazing, truly amazing, how you are able to bring to the surface a clear and definable personality. Effortlessly and ambiguously unmask the facade.

    Michael
    Hi Michael,

    Jack is a complex character. Felt I had to update the old English drama with my own subjective observations from my early childhood in Switzerland, where I grew up 1963-73.
    Having been beaten by a Swiss teacher when I was 6 years old, I will never forget the humiliation and the suffering he caused me with his bamboo stick. His name was Dr. Eisenring!
    He is proberly dead by now. he lived in the St.Gallen area, in the German part of today's Switzerland.

    Fred

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    Sorry for the unpleasant memories Fredrik.

    A memorable treatment of music and literature; hopefully a cleansing process for you.

    Michael
    "...Wiktor's a Jekyll-Hyde personality..." - Lycos Music
    http://www.miserymadebeautiful.com

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    Quote Originally Posted by Michael A. Wiktor View Post
    Sorry for the unpleasant memories Fredrik.

    A memorable treatment of music and literature; hopefully a cleansing process for you.

    Michael
    No worries Michael! (as they say in Australia.)

    I've come over those dark moments many years ago.

    Now I use some of those memories to compose new fictional pieces with the help of the fabulous GPO...lol!

    Fred

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    Fred:
    Masterfully done. Very creative and imaginative with great depiction.
    Excellent scoring. This is indeed your element.
    One adverse comment: I thought your endings of #1 and #2 were rather abrupt, especially after introducing new material. Does this relate directly to the story line?

    Steve

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    Quote Originally Posted by sosmus View Post
    Fred:
    Masterfully done. Very creative and imaginative with great depiction.
    Excellent scoring. This is indeed your element.
    One adverse comment: I thought your endings of #1 and #2 were rather abrupt, especially after introducing new material. Does this relate directly to the story line?

    Steve
    Hi Steve,

    Yes! In the first piece I try to describe the murder of Piggy.

    I then quickly turn some pages in Sir William Golding's story.


    The next episode describes how the Hunters chase Ralph with the intention to kill him.

    The next piece describes how Ralph is chased by the Hunters and is saved.

    It's only in cinematic orchestral story telling that I do abrubt cutting in the music material. It's because the music has a secondary roll!

    Thanks for lending an ear Steve!

    Fred

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    Re: Hirakiri Jack

    Holy mackerel! Finally, a version of Lord of the Flies
    I actually like... too bad they didn't present it this way
    in high school... rofl!

    Jokes aside, my friend -- what a wild ride, a hyper-
    Wagnerian rewrite of Sir William Gerald Golding's classic
    that could give the master author himself pause for
    dramatic thought.

    "Hirikari Jack" especially, that darkness and light in
    an impossible combination... beautifully conceived.

    My best,



    David
    www.DavidSosnowski.com

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