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    "The Long Staircase"

    This is my attempt at trying to create a more rich arrangement to set a mood. I was going for a beautifully mysterious feel, almost like an astronaut is landing on some strange planet and is finding things that are intimidating, but also things that are wondrous. I was also trying to create a song without a really blatant melody line as most of my songs are very melodic and I've been trying to branch out into more loose music. I still don't think I'm quite there arrangement wise but this is one of my favorite arrangements I've done. I've also never created a song nearly this long before. It wasn't even my intention but I kept liking the way it was going and when I was done there wasn't anything I wanted to take out.

    Tell me what you think:
    "The Long Staircase"
    http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page...songID=7605205

    -Daniel

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    Re: "The Long Staircase"

    Hey Daniel, job well done!
    I was waiting for some serious chromaticism and got just a bit around 1:22 from the left hand. Some suggestions: you have many long sustains that could use some "slight movement" (counterpoint) "underneath". And maybe a bit more dynamic changes - "swells"? How about some brass?

    Honestly, well done! Very much enjoyed the ending. I guess you were saving the "swells" till then.

    M
    "...Wiktor's a Jekyll-Hyde personality..." - Lycos Music
    http://www.miserymadebeautiful.com

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    Re: "The Long Staircase"

    <<Some suggestions: you have many long sustains that could use some "slight movement" (counterpoint) "underneath".>>

    You're referring to the long sustains in the strings right? I always feel like strings are my weak point because I struggle with moving them around without the piece sounding too busy.

    <<And maybe a bit more dynamic changes - "swells"? How about some brass?>>

    Great idea! I'll definitely look into that.

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    Re: "The Long Staircase"

    Not necessarily the strings ... just your melodic writing. I felt your work needed an "undercurrent" below the "sustaining lines" to move the piece forward.

    M
    "...Wiktor's a Jekyll-Hyde personality..." - Lycos Music
    http://www.miserymadebeautiful.com

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    Re: "The Long Staircase"

    Hi, Daniel

    Rather pretty piece you have there - Definitely in the "atmospheric" mode, as you were going for. It's a fair stretch of time to maintain that one delicately suspenseful mood - perhaps it didn't need this length.

    I think perhaps what the others have been alluding to is that this seems a series of chord changes without much voice leading connecting them. We hang on a chord, arpeggiate a bit, then move to the next chord. It keeps the sound clean and simple, and well suited for the underscoring for a scene with dialogue perhaps - But I feel there's more potential development that could be done in order for it to stand more strongly on its own.

    Sounded very nice.

    Randy

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    Re: "The Long Staircase"

    Sets the mood nicely. As it is now, it seems to be the background for something else - maybe as Randy suggests a scene with dialog. I agree with the others that if it is to be heard as an independent piece of music it needs something else - a counter melody or other type of counter point, a vocal line floating above or something.
    Trent P. McDonald

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    Re: "The Long Staircase"

    Thanks for the great advice. I've been working on adding a counterpoint melody below the piano line in the horns and it sounds fantastic! Really brings it closer to what I was going for.

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    Re: "The Long Staircase"

    Have you updated the recording? I would like to hear it.


    M
    "...Wiktor's a Jekyll-Hyde personality..." - Lycos Music
    http://www.miserymadebeautiful.com

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