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    Need some help

    I wrote this a couple days ago. It's a great idea, but it's missing a good ending.

    I got reeeeeally lazy writing the last verse. I wrote all 4 and did all the singing.

    If anyone on here would like to rewrite the 4th verse, I can give credits in the video, and It would be much appreciated.

    That's pretty much it guys. Thanks!

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vXAZKMUxjT0
    Yours Truly,
    TubaJediMaster
    May the Fourth Be With You

    My demos:
    http://www.box.net/shared/ejtluyupfb

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    Re: Need some help

    HI Tuba Jedimr
    Not my area, but I would suggest that you post the words. This is mostly strophic & the problem is in the rhythm/rhyming.
    Place the words in verses and see where the problem comes from. The music is the same so the words must have equal syllables within the melodic flow.

    Gary.

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