View the lot of comments I got on this short piece, I guess there are perhaps not so much fans of baroque in here, or perhaps this work is not as good as it should be (more probable I guess !)
Originally Posted by rolifer
This one is a bit quick but I guess if that is all you have to say, it does work.
I totally agree on that. As beginner in composition, I really do have some difficulties to build up my melodies and theme. I hope I will learn, with experience to more build up and enlarge (not sure about this word in english, sorry I'm french) my music.
I enjoyed hearing this piece and, although I am no expert in the baroque style,
it sounded very much like it.
From a compositional point of view I would build up more the crescendo
(which starts around 1:00), emphasizing more the chord progressions.
I would also lengthen a bit the finale so that it would be
in the right proportion to the crescendo.
From a dynamic point of view you can really make it sound better by smoothing
the passages between bars so that there are less repeated accentuations.
The use of of modulation (CC1) would really get out the dynamics of each instrument,
especially in the crescendo and finale.
The first thing I noticed is that the soloists are almost indistinguishable from the rest of the orchestra. It's more of a concerto grosso.
It does sound baroque. I would have expected it to be a bit longer, with a modulation to another key somewhere in the final progression, then a repetition, and only then a coda, and a less abrupt ending too, but that doesn't imply that it's a bad composition. I like baroque, and this is quite pleasant to hear. It sounded a bit Italian to me, say Corelli. The rendering could use a bit of work, but it's effective.
I'm a baroque musician and I thought your piece was nice. Actually think performance wise it would sound better at a slightly quicker tempo, and with a bit more swing to the dotted rhythm. Also, try emphasizing down beats and strong portions beats. In baroque music, you generally want to follow the beat hierarchy. For instance, if you have four eighth notes, you place the strongest emphasis on the first and third notes ( the "good" notes) and place weaker emphasis on the second and especially the fourth note ( the "bad" notes). This is not suppose to be strictly followed but only in general.
The andante movement of RV 153 is in a similar structure to your composition. Here's a good performance of it (starts at 2:26):
You can hear the strong emphasis on the downbeat and the exaggerated swinging dotted rhythm in their performance. Although, I do think they could have played it a little faster, but it's still a fine performance.
Händel? Nice piece, try more variation in volume/dynamics and tempo.
Accent the notes for that rhythmic beat in baroque music (and I always wondered why the "modern" versions need some drumbox, it is rhythmic enough). Go on with it.